just a dot

the sun climbed the day
toward the west
as the world took rest
 a lady lay
on the cold bed of pain and sweat.
Bloodied hands took that was naught
to destroy that was to be brought.

As she fell asleep
in one corner,
the unbehest Figure starts to weep
over the murder
of HIS own dear.

A decade and 7 years on,
i hear the wrong
her sorrow, ringing with mine.

How i wish, i’d know you unborn
foetus,
today i mourned,
the death of my forlorn sis.

9 Responses to “just a dot”

  1. The only change I can offer here is to remove the parenthesized ‘(for men)’ and make naught as “naught”. My two cents
    Otherwise, good job

  2. Sorry, but I think you meant to say “foetus” Osci.

  3. I meant put the word naught in double quotes, so u convey the message that though most people consider it to be nothing, you dont think so.

  4. burpingbutterfly Says:

    I loved it! *Hug* Why are there two of u??

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